Moonkie

Before
After

Why the Before Doesn't Work:

  • Generic Headline: "Winter Sale - Grab your favorites before they melt away!" is vague and doesn't communicate the product value or savings effectively.
  • Lack of Product Focus: The main image of a baby is cute but doesn’t showcase the products or their benefits clearly.
  • Unengaging CTA: "Up to 65% OFF" is generic and lacks personalization or urgency.
  • No Product Exploration: The layout doesn’t invite users to browse other options or see what’s available, limiting engagement.

Why the After Work:

  • Clear, Value-Driven Headline: "Save up to 60% on our best-selling products" directly communicates savings and highlights popular items, making it more enticing.
  • Product-Centric Visuals: Featuring a gift set and toys helps users instantly understand what’s on sale and envision the items for their child.
  • Exploration Options: The "Explore other sets" section showcases additional products (e.g., Playtime gift set, Silicone baby food containers), encouraging users to browse and add to their cart.
  • Action-Oriented CTA: "Shop All Discounted Best Sellers" motivates users to view more products with a sense of urgency and value.
  • Additional Perks: Free shipping on orders over $75 is clearly highlighted, incentivizing larger purchases.

Supporting Data

  • Product-Centric Visuals Improve Engagement: Images that focus on products increase purchase intent by 58% (Nielsen Norman Group).
  • Category Exploration Boosts Sales: Offering more browsing options can increase average cart size by 25% (Baymard Institute).
  • Clear Value Props Convert: Headlines with savings and product benefits improve conversion rates by up to 36% (HubSpot).
  • Urgency-Driven CTAs Perform: Adding urgency-focused language increases click-through rates by 28% (OptinMonster).